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Edward Profile in Rain (EW)
Title: For Those Who Have Fallen from High Places
Author: [info]bratanimus
Fandom: Twilight
Warnings: None
Rating: PG
Word Count: 1,469
Pairing: Edward/Bella, Jasper/Alice, Emmett/Rosalie, Carlisle/Esme
Summary: The wedding. To her, I’m just Edward, and I’m seventeen, and it’s as if no time at all has passed since I became what I am, because she is here now to help me mark the time with her.
Author’s Notes: Written because I could not resist. Are there any Twilight communities in which to post this?






You’d think after a hundred years you’d be prepared for this, Edward.

I shoot Alice a half-hearted glare, because it’s all I can manage right now. I am positively vibrating with nervousness. Somehow, perhaps because of the guests seated in white chairs on our lawn, Alice resists the impulse to stick her tongue out at me. She giggles to see me so rattled. I hear the word poised bouncing around in her mind, but I tune it out. I’m certain she’s only trying to calm me down, but today there wasn’t even much that Jasper could do for me. How can anyone convince me that I deserve this day? When Bella is so perfect, and I’m … well, I’m still trying to see myself as she sees me.

Jasper did attempt, though. He insisted on playing his twelve-string, and now he sits behind me on our wide front steps, dapper in his dark gray suit. He lounges casually, the curve of the guitar’s body resting on his right thigh, as if this is just another August day, as if his playing for us is nothing special. He plays well, of course, and Alice’s golden eyes watch his slender fingers like she’s memorizing the movements.

Emmett stands next to me, huge and smiling, his hands clasped demurely in front of him. He has memorized what he jokingly calls his “sermon,” and I’m more than a little fearful of what may actually come out of that irreverent mouth of his. But Bella said she trusted him, and she wouldn’t have anyone else conduct the service but our own newly licensed Reverend Emmett.

I look at the pale and beautiful faces of my family and, for the hundredth time today, I’m thankful that it’s overcast so we don’t have to do this inside. Bella deserves just exactly this.

Esme and Carlisle sit hand-in-hand next to Alice and a subdued Rosalie, right in front of me, on the groom’s side.

Groom.

The word causes another tremor to wobble its way into my chest and I swallow out of habit. I focus on the other guests.

Renée and Phil sit on the other side of the aisle. Bella’s friends are behind them … all except one. Jacob’s absence, I admit, was a relief to me. I want all her attention today. Perhaps he knew that. Perhaps he’s letting me have it.

There are gauzy white bows that Alice made herself with fabric and gardening wire, which she attached to the chairs at the ends of each of the two rows. The bows quiver in the breeze, and I see other colors within the shimmering white material – pink, yellow, silver, blue, violet. There is dew in the grass at my feet. This day is perfect, and yet I wish again, for Bella’s sake, that we could be in Las Vegas in our blue jeans or, even better, alone in our meadow.

Afterwards, I promise myself. After the party. It was Bella’s wish, and that’s where she’ll – we’ll – sleep later. As husband and wife. Under the stars, or the clouds, under whatever sky the evening graces us with tonight. Under the whispering pines and the creaking branches. Crushing the flowers and the grasses with our bodies, alone together, we’ll give ourselves to each other, to forever, to –

Jasper has stopped playing.

My head whips – not too quickly, I hope – toward our front door.

I stop breathing, because I’ve forgotten. There. There is –

My bride.

My body follows where my eyes have landed, slowly, and I lose track of everything going on around me. I’m only dimly aware of Bella’s gloved hand resting in the crook of Charlie’s elbow, stiffly bent in its new suit … the fresh purple foxgloves in the bouquet in her left hand … the lace at the neckline of the old-fashioned gown Alice found for her.

I know she’s wearing flat shoes. She’d wanted to avoid any clumsiness in what was already likely to be a hazardous outfit. She’d smiled and blushed when she’d told me in my room – our room – and I’d made her show me the satin shoes for proof. She did, and I’d kissed her feet in them, over and over again until she’d had to reach for me to join her on the bed.

Bella waits at the top of the stairs like an angel perched on the parapets of heaven, taking in my face as if she’s seeing it for the first time and is pleased. And now, as she descends the stairs as Bella Swan to join me as Bella Cullen, I feel myself not as a hundred and seven, but as seventeen again. She is my bride, and this is my family, and hers, and we’re out in the open air with the wind in our faces, and I see nothing, nothing but her. And to her, I’m just Edward, and I’m seventeen, and it’s as if no time at all has passed since I became what I am, because she is here now to help me mark the time with her.

And I am so grateful that a sob shudders out of me, and I remember to breathe again, and the first breath I take is of her, and it’s like I’m born again. I’m grateful that this angel has allowed herself to fall to earth, because that means I can climb out of hell to meet her.

Bella settles herself facing me, and I see someone – Charlie – kissing her cheek before he goes to take his place in the front row.

And then there’s no one but us.

I recognize, logically, that Emmett is still standing squarely above and between us on the lawn, and I register that his voice is booming, but I don’t quite hear the words. I hear polite giggles coming from our guests, and Bella and I smile along with them, but tomorrow we won’t remember what it was Emmett said that was so funny, or inappropriate.

Because time is doing something strange to us right now.

Bella’s eyes are shimmering with tears, and I’ve never seen her look so happy, so reverent, so … complete. She’s nervous, of course, but it’s not because of all the eyes on us, or the fear of becoming “that girl.” She’s made peace with that, somehow, and not just for me. I trust that now. No, there’s something else that makes her heart patter like a rabbit’s in front of me, that brings the blood to her cheeks, that makes a single tear roll slowly down her beaming face.

And it’s the same thing that makes me feel alive today, that makes me feel whole again. My body is vibrating so powerfully that it seems a heart beats inside my chest.

It is simply this. It is the electricity that exists between us, the feeling we felt the first time we sat in the dark together at school. It’s so strong I’m shocked that people can’t see it, surprised that people’s limbs don’t accidentally glance off it when they pass too close to us, like meteors deflected off some planet’s atmosphere. The gentle but immutable tug that keeps me tied to Bella like a moon, and her to me. The hum of our bodies that makes everything, even time, irrelevant.

And before we know it, the sermon becomes quiet, which I must surmise means that Emmett has taken this seriously after all. And we are saying our vows, so quietly that I doubt anyone but my family can hear us, but I can’t be bothered and neither can Bella. Because we are saying them for each other, to each other, the first words of our committed existence together. My voice seems far away somehow; but I think each word as I say it, as if I could etch the words themselves into my body, my mind, my – my soul. And I let each of Bella’s words sink into me, like rain turning hard, white marble into something shining and alive.

Then our lips meet, so very softly, and we stand, clinging to each other, as still as if we were one statue, our clothing and hair rustling in the breeze, while our family and friends stand and smile and clap for us.

Emmett turns us roughly to face the others, and we grin shyly at everyone, taking in the faces of the small band of family and friends who, knowingly or unknowingly, witnessed a most unorthodox union and promised to support it forever, or for as long as they live. My hand around Bella’s waist feels different somehow, and I’m not sure yet whether it’s me or us that’s different.

With another of Emmett’s shoves, we are pushed into our future.

Together.




Well, this is my first Twilight fic, probably the first of many because I am utterly besotted. Feedback would simply dazzle me. :)

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[info]vnfan wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 06:09 am (UTC)
I love that fic! I love Edward's POV. *sigh*

You could consider posting to:
http://community.livejournal.com/la_bellaragazza/profile

http://community.livejournal.com/tm_switzerland/profile

http://community.livejournal.com/edward_dazzles/profile

Also, at the Twilight Archives you can post anything. You have to submit/apply but they don't turn anyone down. http://www.twilightarchives.com/

[info]bratanimus wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 09:51 am (UTC)
Thank you! I have a feeling I'm going to be exploring Edward's POV quite a bit ... ;)

Thank you for the recs on where to post. I'll go take a look! :D
[info]cuban_sombrero wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 06:57 am (UTC)
There's always [info]twilight_book, or being Edward/Bella, there's [info]lion_lamb, I'm pretty sure they allow posting like this.

That said, I really loved this, even though I'm not the biggest fan of Edward/Bella. You've gotten into his head exceptionally well, and I adored the little descriptive touches. The mood was superb and really drew me into the story, and it's what made me keep reading throughout.
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 09:55 am (UTC)
Thank you for the recs for where to post, and thank you for your kind words regarding this fic! I'm very pleased you think I got into Edward's head, and that the mood hooked you.

Do you ship anyone in the series? If so, who? *is curious* :D

Thanks again!
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[info]scarlett71177 wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 07:27 am (UTC)
GAH!!!!!!!!!!

This was so beautiful! I love the perspective, first of all. I think you nailed Edward's voice perfectly. All the characterizations were wonderful. It's beautifully phrased and I loved this bit:

I stop breathing, because I’ve forgotten. There. There is –

My bride.


*sigh* I think I stopped breathing too. ♥

Thank you so much for sharing this. Would you mind if I rec'd it at [info]to_our_meadow a E/B community? If you'd rather I not that's OK too.

Well done!
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 10:00 am (UTC)
Thank you!! :D

You absolutely made my day when you said I nailed Edward's voice. *hugs* I'm hoping to explore his POV much, much more, but I figured this was as good as anyplace to start, lol. I'm glad you liked that bit you pointed out. I wanted to make Edward stutter a little before he found his voice - and his breath - again.

Oh, I would be extremely pleased (and honored!) if you rec'd it at [info]to_our_meadow. Thank you very much!

*blushes* :)
[info]hrymfaxe wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 08:11 am (UTC)
Even though I haven't read these books and do not know the characters I enjoyed this ficlet. You have an amazing way with language like in this paragraph:

It is simply this. It is the electricity that exists between us, the feeling we felt the first time we sat in the dark together in school. It’s so strong I’m shocked that people can’t see it, surprised that people’s limbs don’t accidentally glance off it when they pass too close to us, like meteors deflected off some planet’s atmosphere. The gentle but immutable tug that keeps me tied to Bella like a moon, and her to me. The hum of our bodies that makes everything, even time, irrelevant.

You stay beautifully within the universe metaphor using it in very meaningful ways. Go you! And also it is just a wonderful way of describing the coocon that seems to be around those who love each other.

On a more humourous note, this fic made me get the joke in a comic I saw the other day, which involved Jacob! ;) You can see it here
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 10:10 am (UTC)
Oh, cute comic! *giggle* :D

I'm very happy that you got something out of this ficlet, even though you haven't read the books. You know, it's true, this could almost be anyone on their wedding day, couldn't it? I'm so pleased that it spoke to you.

Thank you for pointing out one of my favorite passages from this little story. I do imagine that the force of Edward's and Bella's attraction is almost like their own force field, sending most people (except Jacob!) careening off into space, unable to get too close.

Thank you again for reading, and for taking the time to leave such kind thoughts! :D
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[info]jadeddiva wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 01:47 pm (UTC)
GORGEOUS. Absolutely gorgeous.

I don't think I've ever read an Edward/Bella wedding piece that captured them - and the emotions of a wedding - as well as this does. I love the tenderness and electricity between them, and I love how he feels young again because of Bella.

I fail at giving really long, really glowing reviews so I'll just say this made my morning. Fantastic :)

(and i [info]vnfan's suggestions)
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 02:01 pm (UTC)
Thank you!! Your review made MY morning. *hugs*

I'm so glad that you think I've captured Edward and Bella and the mood of their wedding in this. To me Edward seems like he's always got the cares of the world on his shoulders, so for him to feel simply 17 again on his wedding day ... well, that seems like the biggest gift Bella could unwittingly give him.

Thank you! *glows*
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[info]javidan wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 01:58 pm (UTC)
Breathtaking, dear! You've portrayed Edward perfectly; such intensity and insecurity and happiness. *gush*

Some parts really impacted me: "I feel myself not as a hundred and seven, but as seventeen again. She is my bride, and this is my family, and hers, and we’re out in the open air with the wind in our faces, and I see nothing, nothing but her", and "that means I can climb out of hell to meet her", and finally this, "It is the electricity that exists between us".

Also enjoyed the snippets of Jasper *luv* and Emmett at the beginning --- you're making all your readers happy here!
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 02:07 pm (UTC)
Oh, thank you!! :D

I'm so very pleased that you think I've portrayed Edward decently. That's very important to me, so it's very gratifying to know it's coming across. Thank you again.

I'm glad you liked the snippets of Jasper and Emmett love. How could I neglect those two? ;)

I appreciate your mentioning those particular passages, because they are some of my favorites. I love the image of the two of them out in the open air, unashamed, able to declare their love for one another publicly. And the line about that means I can climb out of hell to meet her is actually probably my favorite in the piece, because I think of what Edward's life was like before Bella. Someone (Esme, I think?) says in the first book that it was like he woke up, or something like that, when he fell in love with Bella. So, to me, the marriage really is his allowing himself out of hell.

Thank you so much for your thoughtful comments. :D
[info]duck_or_rabbit wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 02:46 pm (UTC)
Oh, this is a lovely fic! Edward's voice is wonderful and aptly handled. I love the bit about Bella wearing flats -- it's a clue to just how intuitively these two know each other

I am glad you will be writing Twlight fanfic! It will be a pleasure to read your work :D

[info]bratanimus wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 03:57 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad you liked Edward's voice in this, and the detail about Bella's shoes. (I spent FAR more time looking for comfortable shoes for my wedding than I did looking for a dress, so in that sense she and I are a lot alike, lol.)

Thanks again! :D
[info]ladybracknell wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 03:37 pm (UTC)
So you're officially addicted now, then? ;)

I just adored this. That central idea of Edward feeling none of his hundred or so years was really breathtaking, and so so real for Edward - I always imagine him a bit frozen in time, as if his whole existence he's been waiting for what he should have had at 17, never really expecting that he'll find it. I think that's one of the things that makes him so compelling, that he's finally getting what he's always wanted but had given up on the hope of finding - I think that's why he's always so immediately honest about how he feels about her - he doesn't want to waste any more time. I thought you really captured him, and now I'll be a bit disappointed if the actual wedding in Breaking Dawn isn't exactly like this.

I always love your writing - I'm so pleased you're hooked on this :D.
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 03:55 pm (UTC)
Addicted? Oh yes. Oh yes indeed. ;)

Thank you for your kind words. I'm so pleased that you liked this and that you thought I captured Edward's voice. And I think your observations about Edward are spot on, that he wears his heart on his sleeve for Bella precisely because he's waited so long for her. He can't afford to waste time, or to risk losing her. *grumbles over the Jacob glitch* Ah well; even vampires are not perfect. ;)

I have to mention the foxgloves in her bouquet. I know how you love symbolism of flowers, and when I found out that foxglove is the state flower of Washington state, I did a little research on it. One of its medicinal values used to be "to those who have fallen from high places," which I thought was perfect symbolically for both of them, hence the title of the fic. Edward sees his existence as demonic, so he has essentially "fallen." And he sees Bella as so much better than him, so she is choosing to fall in order to be with him. Then of course they have both fallen madly in love with each other. And then there's the whole klutzy thing with Bella. Subtle, but I knew if anyone would appreciate my thinking behind the flower thing it'd be you. ;)

Thank you again. I'm so very excited about Twilight and look forward to writing much more. :D

BTW, I just read the first chapter of Midnight Sun, and it was BREATHTAKING. So great to get inside Edward's head during that first day. What did you think??
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[info]moonlitwoods wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 04:32 pm (UTC)
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You left such a brilliant review on my story this morning that when I saw you'd written one I had to attempt to return the favor. :)

You know, I'm not the typical romantic, but this really touched my heart. It's the author's Edward, only somehow, better. Truly beautiful.

There were a number of lines that struck me:

How can anyone convince me that I deserve this day? When Bella is so perfect, and I’m … well, I’m still trying to see myself as she sees me.

Perfectly captures him, in my opinion. Edward is confident and at the same time hesitant, as if he's still expecting her to run away screaming. His humility, blended with his willingness to gamble that he'll be proven worthy, is one of the best parts of his character -- and that's saying something. :)

He has memorized what he jokingly calls his “sermon,” and I’m more than a little fearful of what may actually come out of that irreverent mouth of his.

I actually laughed out loud at this. The characterization is dead on.

Jacob’s absence, I admit, was a relief to me. I want all her attention today.

Again, including this thought among all the others is perfect. I would hope Jacob would respond to Edward's honest respect with consideration, but that remains to be seen. I hope it turns out the way you've suggested here.

I know she’s wearing flat shoes.

A detail that would never be missed by a Tonks writer, although it's generally Alice who reminds me of our lost Auror.

Bella waits at the top of the stairs like an angel perched on the parapets of heaven...

I’m grateful that this angel has allowed herself to fall to earth, because that means I can climb out of hell to meet her.


As you might imagine, these angel references leapt out at me. It's an incredibly powerful and beautiful image for Edward. I can't get past it, personally, and I was thrilled to see your allusions to it here -- even before you'd read my story. :)

Thank you for a lovely moment. Excellent work.

P.S. Something you said in your review reminded me: has anyone steered you toward the unpublished first chapter of Midnight Sun yet? It's Twilight from Edward's POV, or will be if Ms. Meyer gets it finished and published. It's a must read for the Edward-centric fan. Cheers.
...
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 04:49 pm (UTC)
After I read your wonderful story, I was struck by the similarities in some of the imagery we both used. I'm very glad that you liked this one. Thank you SO much for your thoughtful feedback; it means a lot. :)

I'm really pleased that you thought I captured Edward's voice; that's very important to me, so I'm glad it worked for you. I think your description of Edward's humility, blended with his willingness to gamble that he'll be proven worthy is absolutely spot on, and I want to strive for that in my own writing.

I'm glad, too, that you liked the bits with Emmett and the mention of Jacob. I, too, hope that Jake will stay away for the wedding, to allow the lovers their perfectly happy moment, unstained by the complications of Bella's affection for him.

Hee hee, yes, Bella's clumsiness is Tonksian; but I'm with you: Alice seems much more Tonks in spirit (and hairdo!), doesn't she? ;)

You picked out two of my favorite passages, about Bella perched like and angel on the parapets, and Edward allowing himself to crawl out of hell to meet her. I'm glad the image of him like that moved you.

And yes, I finally read Midnight Sun, after I'd read your story; so now I understand the venom in his mouth was Meyers' choice. That's really an inspired detail she threw in, and I thought you utilized it so very well in your story.

Thank you again for leaving such detailed and thoughtful comments. I appreciate it. :D

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[info]train_lindz wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 04:35 pm (UTC)
Oh, this is lovely and so well written. It's as if I can picture myself being there, and experiencing everything along with Edward. It seems to be rare that authors can get the voice of Edward right, and you've hit the nail right on the head.

and I love Reverend Emmett :)
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 04:52 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! I'm glad that the descriptions put you there at the wedding, and especially that you thought I got Edward's voice. That means a lot to me. I'm pleased, too, that you liked Reverend Emmett; there's just something about that that makes me giggle, and yet it's perfect, too, isn't it?

Thanks again! :)
[info]andacus wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 08:32 pm (UTC)
SQUEEEEE!! Oh thank you for that! It made me do that little silly grin thing and my voice go up an octave as I said, "Awww."

Absolutely lovely.
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Mar. 30th, 2008 09:04 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad it was squee worthy. :D
[info]pamoreno wrote:
Mar. 31st, 2008 12:24 am (UTC)
Damn! I missed this, but I'll read it tonight.

*hugs* Thanks for all the fics! ;)
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 04:03 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I hope you like it. :D
[info]riveroad wrote:
Mar. 31st, 2008 04:11 am (UTC)
Run away with me? Because I think I'm in love with you.

Ok, perhaps slightly too much lol but I can't describe the hideous squeal that left my mouth when I realized one of my favourite authors had done a Twilight fic! Since I finished Eclipse, I've been doing nothing but searching for some good things to read - it's always hard searching for new authors and stories when you find a new obsession, isn't it?

This is fabulous. I love the characterization of Edward, the voice you've found. It's lovely and, as someone else said (I think!), if the real wedding's not like this, I might very well cry. There are so many amazing details in this - from the irreverence of Emmett, the mention of Jacob's absence, what he feels when he first sees Bella. Bloody hell, this is just so good. Something that struck me about the books was how Edward seemed to view himself as damned, while I didn't feel that the rest of the Cullens felt quite the same way. It's something you've included here and the way you've spun it is gorgeous.

I'm glad to hear you'll be writing more Twilight. Not to rush you but if you feel like churning it out, please do!
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 04:08 pm (UTC)
Hee hee, I'll run away with you as long as we can bring a vampire or two with us. ;)

I LOVE this series, and I am obsessed with writing about it now (in fact, just started a new one this morning that is almost finished!).

I am so very pleased that you think I got Edward's voice in this; I think he's a fascinating character, with great depths to be explored. And I'm with you: if their wedding doesn't go down more or less like this I'm going to be very upset. :/ You're right, he feels damned; and yet he can't help but gamble at hope when he's with Bella. I think she offers him redemption and it's irresistible to him.

I liked writing Emmett quite a bit, and I may have to write his "sermon," just to find out what exactly he said, hee hee.

Thank you again! I really appreciate your kind words. :D
[info]jate92 wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 03:59 pm (UTC)
I love it. It´s so well written.

"She is my bride, and this is my family, and hers, and we’re out in the open air with the wind in our faces, and I see nothing, nothing but her. And to her, I’m just Edward, and I’m seventeen, and it’s as if no time at all has passed since I became what I am, because she is here now to help me mark the time with her."

So beautiful.
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 04:02 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. You've picked out one of my favorite passages, where Edward acknowledges the joy of being able to share his happiness with everyone publicly, out in the open air. Thank you again. :D
[info]planetgal471 wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 04:07 pm (UTC)
oh lord this was perfect. Maybe your first Twilight fic, but certainly you are a pro at writing already. I love the way Edward worships Bella, and I love seeing it from inside his head. I love this so much I am going to make it my first rec at [info]pianist_singer! I wish we'd got to hear what Emmett says, but it would have bogged down the fic, so almost better is trying to imagine it. Also, brilliant to use that beautiful photo of Jacksper and his guitar so effectively. It added a more real and peaceful air to this. I was especially happy, personally, because this is just how I pictured the wedding. Even subtle details like Carlisle and Esme holding hands reinforce the innocence of the situation. Thank you!
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 04:21 pm (UTC)
Oh, thank you for the rec!! You are too kind. :D

And thank you for your thoughtful feedback on this story. I have been writing a while in other fandoms, but this was my first foray into Twlight. I must say I'm addicted already and have actually nearly finished a second story, which should be posted soon. I'm so pleased that you liked Edward's POV and found his worship of Bella believable. I agree that including Emmett's sermon would have bogged down the fic and lessened the heady experience that it should be. But perhaps I'll write his sermon another time. ;)

I'm glad, too, that you enjoyed the image of Jasper and his guitar. When I discovered he fought with the Confederates, I suddenly had an image of him playing music with his buddies around the fire at night. So that's why he got to play for the wedding. Glad you liked it.

Thank you again for your very kind comments, and for the recommendation at [info]pianist_singer. Nice to meet you! :D
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[info]mandya06 wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 04:17 pm (UTC)
Woooooow, you have an incredible talent. Your writing is descriptive and captivating, and you've written the perfect wedding scene for Edward and Bella (even if my heart aches for poor Jacob). I hope Meyer comes across this so she can take some notes; this is how I want to see the wedding turn out in the last book. You've spoiled me for anything else! *lol*

I can't wait to read more of your Twilight fics. ^_^
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 04:24 pm (UTC)
Wow, THANK you. I really appreciate that. :) You could give me no higher praise than to say that you hope the wedding in Breaking Dawn turns out this way. *grins* I must say, I REALLY hope Meyer gives us something as peaceful and right as this, too.

Thanks again for reading. I've got another fic nearly finished which should be posted soon. :D
[info]hmrpotter wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 04:56 pm (UTC)
Absolutely beautiful!!!!
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 04:59 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much! :D
[info]slicvic321 wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 05:04 pm (UTC)
this was amazing, you are such an incredible writer. i loved how you captured edward emotions in every part of the story. i would much rather read this in breaking dawn than hear what bellas gonna say. this just seems more pure and full of incredible detail. i cant wait to read more
please write more soon! :D


[info]bratanimus wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 05:16 pm (UTC)
Oh, thank you so much!! I'm pleased that you think I captured Edward's emotions in this; he's really a lot of fun to write. :) I hope the wedding in BD happens this way, too, because we've all suffered enough not to get the payoff of the wedding. ;)

And rest assured, I am working on a new Edward POV fic right now. Thanks again for your very sweet comments! :D
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[info]ousoonerfan wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 05:06 pm (UTC)
love the story
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 05:17 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! :D
[info]indyangel wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 05:06 pm (UTC)
That was amazing!
I'm not usually a big fan of fanfics but that was definitely an exception to my rule =)
I love the way you seem to have captured the essence of Edward and his feelings for Bella. Truly beautiful =)!
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 05:18 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm happy you thought I captured Edward's characterization in this. I appreciate it! Thanks for stopping by. :)
[info]anarogue587 wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 05:10 pm (UTC)
Oh, my God AWESOME!!!!!!!! This was lovely!
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 05:19 pm (UTC)
Oh, thank you!! I'm very pleased that you liked it! :D
[info]v_thundermuffin wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 05:17 pm (UTC)
This was an exceptional story. It was so lyrical, the verbiage just antiquated enough to make it flow perfectly. It was (and I mean this as a sincere compliment) so very Edward.

I look forward to reading more of your stories. This was absolutely amazing! :)
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 05:21 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! I'm especially pleased that you noticed the word choice. I tried to let the old-fashioned Edward peep out in his verbiage, so it's very gratifying to know that someone noticed it besides me. ;)

I'm actually working on another Edward POV story as we speak. Thanks for popping over to read this one. And thanks again for your very thoughtful comments. :D
[info]greyskygirl wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 06:30 pm (UTC)
Beautiful. It's not hard to get besotted with this pair, is it?

I think your characterization was spot-on, and I could use up the character limit here pointing out all my favorite lines. There were so many. It was so, so well done; reading it made me happy.

Thanks for sharing.
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 06:36 pm (UTC)
Oh, thank you! I'm pleased you thought the characterization worked, and I am extra pleased that reading this made you happy. :) Thanks for reading and sharing such lovely feedback. :D
(Anonymous) wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 06:46 pm (UTC)
Wow. That is probably the best Twilight FanFic that i've read so far. You really captured all of Edwards feelings. I suddenly feel very tearful. Thank You. x
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 07:02 pm (UTC)
Oh, thank you! I really appreciate it, and I'm glad it gave you an emotional response. I'm pleased that you thought I captured Edward's characterization. Thanks for reading. :D
[info]be_cool_bec wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 08:38 pm (UTC)
This is gorgeous, a really great read, i hope its the first of many! i love it.

Side note: I'm in love with your journal header! /random
[info]bratanimus wrote:
Apr. 1st, 2008 08:53 pm (UTC)
Oh, thank you! I'm so pleased that you enjoyed it. (And yes, it is the first of many. ;))

Thanks for the compliment on my journal header. It's a photo of Jeff Buckley, one of my favorite singers (who, sadly, passed away in the 1990s - he drowned). There are so many of his songs that make me think of E/B. *sigh*
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